I walked into the first class that I have ever
taught and confronted utter chaos. The four students in my Latin class were
engaged in a heated spitball battle. They were all following the lead of Andrew,
a tall eleven-year-old African-American boy.
Andrew turned to me and said, "Why are we
learning Latin if no one speaks it? This a waste of time."
I broke out in a cold sweat. I thought, "How
on Earth am I going to teach this kid?"
It was my first day of Summerbridge, a nationwide
collaborative of thirty-six public and private high schools. Its goal is to
foster a desire to learn in young, underprivileged students, while also exposing
college and high-school students to teaching. Since I enjoy tutoring, I decided
to apply to the program. I thought to myself, "Teaching can't be that
difficult. I can handle it." I have never been more wrong in my life.
After what seemed like an eternity, I ended that
first class feeling as though I had accomplished nothing. Somehow I needed to
catch Andrew's attention. For the next two weeks, I tried everything from indoor
chariot races to a Roman toga party, but nothing seemed to work.
During the third week, after I had exhausted all
of my ideas, I resorted to a game that my Latin teacher had used. A leader yells
out commands in Latin and the students act out the commands. When I asked Andrew
to be the leader, I found the miracle that I had been seeking. He thought it was
great that he could order the teacher around with commands such as "jump in
place" and "touch the window." I told him that if he asked me in
Latin to do something, I would do it as long as he would do the same. With this
agreement, I could teach him new words outside the classroom, and he could make
his teacher hop on one foot in front of his friends. Andrew eventually gained a
firm grasp of Latin.
Family night occurred during the last week of
Summerbridge. We explained to the parents what we had accomplished. At the
conclusion, Andrew's mom thanked me for teaching him Latin. She said,
"Andrew wanted to speak Latin with someone, so he taught his younger
brother."
My mouth fell open. I tempered my immediate
desire to utter, "Andrew did what?" I was silent for a few seconds as
I tried to regain my composure, but when I responded, I was unable to hide my
surprise.
That night I remembered a comment an English
teacher had made to me. I had asked her, "Why did you become a
teacher?"
She responded with a statement that perplexed me
at the time. She said, "There is nothing greater than empowering someone
with the love of knowledge." Now, I finally understood what she meant.
When I returned to Summerbridge for my second
summer, the first words out of Andrew's mouth were, "Is there going to be a
Latin class this year?"
COMMENTS:
This is a strong essay,
in part because the writer opens with action and paints a vivid picture of
the situation in the
reader’s mind (“I walked into the first class that I
have ever taught and confronted utter chaos.”). Precise details and
descriptions, such as “cold sweat,” “indoor chariot races,” and
“Roman toga party,” help solidify the scene. The use of dialogue and
thoughts to make points is much more enjoyable to read than simple
declarative statements would be.
What separates this essay
from other good narrative essays is that the writer interposes apt commentary
within the anecdote. Waiting until the final paragraph to discuss how the
experience changed him would have resulted in a drier piece. The essay does
a good job of portraying the writer’s growth during the experience,
because it notes his genuine surprise and subsequent realizations (“I
thought to myself, ‘Teaching can’t be that difficult. I can handle
it.’ I have never been more wrong in my life.”).
The
conclusion is executed well, bringing the reader back to material presented
in the introduction while indirectly emphasizing how the experience has made
a lasting impression upon both the writer and his pupil.
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